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tapuna: TAKE OUT YOUR CARD BLACKIE!! HERE COMES THE CPU

Tuesday, October 21, 2008

tapuna: TAKE OUT YOUR CARD BLACKIE!! HERE COMES THE CPU

Reading your piece was very entertaining partly because I noticed a lot of spelling errors. It is also evident that you were emotionally charged while writing this, in the structuring of your sentences as well as the words you chose to use. I also found that the comments you made in this piece, although it is an opinion piece which highlights how you feel about security guards and the CPU, are just assumptions which you deem true. Your opinion piece is very weak because it is charged with too much emotion which ruins the potential message that could have been sent across. Although there are many important points, there are just as many mistakes. First of all the CPU uniform is navy blue not black, the security guards with the black uniform are from a private company. Secondly your main argument is centred on experiences you and your friends faced, so you can’t assume that this has happened to every black group of guys. You also assumed that the guards are always ‘wearing unsmiling faces’ and that they hate black students because they are ‘angry and jealous’ of us. I don’t think you have the authority to make such statements about people you hardly ever speak to. You don’t know what their background is so you can’t pass your judgements based on mere assumptions. You also contradict yourself by saying that you don’t think you’re better than then and yet you say "they feel threatened by us because they realise that soon they will be working for us".

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